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Grade 7 English
2.21 Omit Needless Words: Conciseness in Writing

Vigorous writing is concise. A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the same reason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine no unnecessary parts.

This requires not that the writer make all his sentences short, or that he avoid all detail and treat his subjects only in outline, but that every word tell.

Many expressions in common use violate this principle:
the question as to whetherwhether (the question whether)
there is no doubt but thatno doubt (doubtless)
used for fuel purposesused for fuel
he is a man whohe
in a hasty mannerhastily
this is a subject whichthis subject
His story is a strange one.His story is strange.

The expression "the fact that" should be revised out of every sentence in which it occurs:
owing to the fact thatsince (because)
in spite of the fact thatthough (although)
call your attention to the fact thatremind you (notify you)
I was unaware of the fact thatI was unaware that (did not know)
the fact that he had not succeededhis failure
the fact that I had arrivedmy arrival

Who is, which was, and the like are often unnecessary and can also be omitted:
His brother, who is a member of the same firmHis brother, a member of the same firm
Trafalgar, which was Nelsonís last battleTrafalgar, Nelsonís last battle

A common violation of conciseness is the presentation of a single complex idea, step by step, in a series of sentences which might to advantage be combined into one:
Macbeth was very ambitious. This led him to wish to become king of Scotland. The witches told him that this wish of his would come true. The king of Scotland at this time was Duncan. Encouraged by his wife, Macbeth murdered Duncan. He was thus enabled to succeed Duncan as king. (55 words.)
Encouraged by his wife, Macbeth achieved his ambition and realized the prediction of the witches by murdering Duncan and becoming king of Scotland in his place. (26 words.)


Directions: Read the following sentences. Rewrite the sentences, omitting needless words and rewording them so that they are more concise.
Q 1: Almost all of the different forms of painting, with the possible exception of pointillism, is easy for children to learn.
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Q 2: It was noticed by the teacher that her students did not necessarily understand the math.
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Q 3: Regardless of the fact that Sue no longer participates in soccer, she still loves to watch it on television.
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Q 4: Sue arrived late to the show due to the fact that her car broke down.
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Q 5: The students are in the habit of forgetting to do their homework.
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Q 6: Remove any and all past due assignments from your desk and turn them in.
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Q 7: I am of the opinion that homework is necessary for a student to succeed in school.
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Q 8: His income is in the neighborhood of fifty thousand dollars a year.
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